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søndag, mars 09, 2003

i'm correcting my London short story... and Gordon underlined a part of my sentence that goes, "Brian quickly realized that Tocker hadn't exactly been working his ass off in the first period..." and she wrote, "Change diction."
also:
"The wrestlers had barely even erected their backs before..." she underlined "erected" and wrote "word choice"

.: posted by Kj 12:57 p.m.